Songs of Seas
Songs of serene seas
trapped within confines of shell
seek slim strands of shore
Doves in Flight
Doves linger long there
silky wayward treading air
into dreamscape flight
I was all set to write a few haikus….then I did a reverse of the syllable count and realized, they weren’t haikus. Then I tried to fix them. I might have fixed them….but then I decided if they don’t exactly fit, they could be renamed to: Alternative Haikus.
Oh who needs haikus? Beautiful stuff.
Quite true, Marissa, ha ha. Thanks…have a great week!
Reinventing the haikus. Love it! You’re so amazing with words. 👏🏻
I suppose these days everything is being reinvented, ha ha. Thanks, Camie!
So very lovely.
Thanks Iris!
It’s a pleasure. 🙂
Rules are made to be broken. Or we can call it free verse lol.
That’s a very good in-joke 😀 I agree, you are good with words!
Thanks Pauline!
Some haikusists seem to spend far too long on the patter not the words
but these are both brilliant LT. 🙂
Thank you Phil. I’m glad you liked my possibly-alternative haikus! 😀
Not only did I like it, LT, you inspired my first (and last) haikus, which I concealed within the first line. I can’t compete with your much classier skills 🙂
Oh yes you can…I’m going to check them out 😀
It´s beautiful, L.T.! And I love the idea of alternative haikus… reminds me of alternative rock, which is also great! 🙂
I agree, Sarah…alternative rock is great. Thanks so much for the compliment, sometimes it is good to shake off the restrictions of form! 😀
Couldn’t agree more! 🙂 Only by shaking off those restrictions we can sometimes fins something even better than that! 🙂 Have a great – restriction less – day! xxx
You have a super day also!
😄
Now this is one “alternative” I can get behind!! Lol
Thanks D.D…..being “alternative” sure takes the pressure off, lol!
Whatever they’re called, I call them beautiful!
Thanks so much, Debbie!
Beautiful word pictures, Lana. The alliteration of the first is alluring. 🙂 I guess you could call these “alternative” haiku, but poetry is the kind of business where rules are made to be broken. A good friend who writes a lot of Haiku for publication says 5-7-5 is thought to be too rigid, now it’s just short-long-short without particular regard to the syllables. I take my liberties in the area of slant vs true rhyming.
Well super cool, I like the idea of short-long-short. You have great command of the many forms of poetry, I am in awe. I have tried a couple of your recent ones, including the Fib….yours is much better…but maybe I’ll post it if I run out of material, lol. I think my strength is “story poems.” I adore slant rhymes! Thank you, Joan!
They’re beautiful alternative haikus. Sometimes beauty doesn’t ascribe to form 🙂
Thanks Diana! And sometimes haikus are rebels 😀
Both 5-7-5 … sounds quite trad to me. Did I miss a meeting? They’re nice, btw …
Thanks Dave. I think I managed to revise them once I saw they were reversed, but I didn’t take the time to check so I wasn’t sure….then I remembered the alternative world we dwell in and thought they might still work :- D
Love these alternative haikus, Lana! Wish I could join the doves in ‘dreamscape flight’.
Thanks Annika, I wouldn’t mind a nice dreamscape flight either :- D
Beautiful alternative Haikus!! Great work dear.Hey i have stared my own blog ( The Diary of the fallen soul). Please visit my blog and if you like it please follow me:). But you are free to refuse. Cheers mate!!