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Celestial Episode

Published by broussardlana on August 25, 2017

This August day

saturated in frost

as the dark

penetrates

the light

that sultry moon

gliding and giddy

with ravishing charm

skirted briefly

the path of the sun

who dares

blot the massive star

of furnace fame?

skipping through

an intersection

of orbital planes

leaning

in the umbral

shadow

arms outstretched

seeking totality

shadowed secrets

emerge

then lithely

bounce away

pearls from heaven

crown the halo corona

those who meet the sun

full face

blind now

as much of the

human race

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55 Comments

  3. Debbie Debbie

    *This* is what I meant by my earlier comment, Lana — it’s so very poetic and free, not at all structured and organized like some of my poems. I suppose there’s a place for both, but for sure yours makes one’s heart soar!

    # August 25, 2017
    • L. T. Garvin, Author L. T. Garvin, Author

      Thank you so much, Debbie. Poetry is hard to write, anyone who says otherwise isn’t being realistic. I have always written “poetry” since jr. high, lol. I didn’t seriously concentrate on it; however, until about two years ago when I began to read some of the really talented WordPress poets. I think that writing poetry helps you to write beautiful prose for books and stories because you have to become so attuned to your senses, perception and language. I liked your poem very much, I have been practicing to write more in the different forms, I also think this is a good thing. I do have issues though, the Eclipse poem started out to be more about the flirty moon interfering with the sun, and it turned (a bit political) at the end because I thought of a certain person looking at the eclipse with no glasses and also not caring enough about our climate to take the necessary precautions there, yep – go figure. It also helps to read a lot of good poetry. I love the Best American Poetry site (you can google). On WordPress, some amazing poets include Desert Dweller (I don’t think she blogs anymore?) Tosha Michelle at Everything I Never Told You https://laliterati.com/ Just Joan 42 https://justjoan42.wordpress.com/ House of Heart https://houseofheartweb.wordpress.com/ You might want to check them out. Keep at it, that’s what we all do…practice, practice 😀

      # August 26, 2017
      • Debbie Debbie

        Great advice — thank you! And stay safe out there. Don’t imagine y’all will see much of Harvey except tons of rain and wind.

        # August 26, 2017
      • Just Joan Just Joan

        Thanks for the recommendation, Lana. Beautiful poetry comes in every stripe, free and formed, rhymed or not, imagery, stories, phrases that catch your attention and get stuck in your soul. Love your site, always thought provoking, full of bits that linger in my mind long after reading it. 🙂

        # August 26, 2017
  6. thecontentedcrafter thecontentedcrafter

    I was so hoping you would write something about your eclipse – and you did and the final lines – just stunning! Is this the finest poem I have read from you yet? And the visuals in the video were just what I needed to see to get me back to my easel – so you start my morning with a wake-me-up poem and a get-me-going visual aide. You are a gem! <3

    # August 25, 2017
    • L. T. Garvin, Author L. T. Garvin, Author

      Oh Pauline, you are so kind! I love to think that I can be an inspiration for you. Oh that’s a beautiful video, I don’t think I’ve told you what an incredible Bruce Springsteen fan I am. Thank you so much, I hope you had a wonderful day!

      # August 26, 2017
  7. Just Joan Just Joan

    I love the moon, like a celestial child “skipping through / an intersection / of orbital planes / leaning / in the umbral / shadow.” The ending was a terrific surprise. 🙂

    # August 25, 2017
    • L. T. Garvin, Author L. T. Garvin, Author

      Thank you, Joan. You know, one of the funny things about poetry is that sometimes it drifts into something else. I was attempting to write about the flirty moon, making the eclipse all about her, but then I thought of a certain, Ahem…., world leader who looked directly at the sun, and I thought about how that group has thrown climate care right out the window, and boom, the ending 😀

      # August 27, 2017
  10. Annika Perry Annika Perry

    Wow! I loved this poem, Lana taking us through the surreal experience of the eclipse – your language is wonderfully cosmic in scope, lyrical and I feel as if I was there! A terrific surprising finale! 😀❤️

    # August 28, 2017
    • L. T. Garvin, Author L. T. Garvin, Author

      Thank you so much, Debby. I wish we could do a better job of taking care of our planet. I wish we had leaders that cared. Meanwhile, they have folks like us reminding them all of their folly.

      # August 30, 2017
      • dgkaye dgkaye

        We need to always keep speaking Lana. I was reading an article the other day about some of the racism going on in the US and came by a slogan which resonated – ‘silence is violence’ . Makes a lot of sense. Never stop speaking. 🙂 x

        # August 30, 2017
  13. Miss Gentileschi Miss Gentileschi

    Just awesome, Lana! Your words made it all happen here for me where sadly there was no eclipse to be observed. As to the last lines: they are perfectly reflecting what (or rather who?) goes on in the world.
    Hope you´re safe in your corner of Texas? Take care! xxxxxx

    # August 30, 2017
    • L. T. Garvin, Author L. T. Garvin, Author

      Thanks Sarah! I wanted to write a poem about a flirty moon who just makes this all about herself, but I couldn’t resist a jab at world leaders who don’t think our climate is worth the effort. We are far from the coast here, so we are safe. I do have kiddos in Houston, though, but they are safe. Much love to you, xo

      # August 30, 2017
      • Miss Gentileschi Miss Gentileschi

        I´m glad you´re safe and hope your kids will stay safe too!
        I think that jab in your poem made it so special, Lana – it was such an unexpected and brilliant twist, like a jab between the eyes to make us more aware 😉 Some of the best songs are more or less hiding something political in their lyrics which is why I think we are so drawn to them, at least I am, and it´s often the same with poetry for me 🙂 xoxo

        # August 31, 2017
  14. mycountryepoque mycountryepoque

    Thank you Lana, I watched the eclipse, a rare thing that I wouldn’t watch if it wasn’t for some friends who pulled me out somewhere to watch, so I went. When I read about “the dark penetrates the light” yup, I knew you must be telling us how interesting it was. And yes, though I don’t really take any notice of eclipse, this year I gave an interest in it. It was fantastic. Thank you for your lovely poem, very simple and interesting. take care now.

    # September 1, 2017

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